Adventure is my name! - A Bernice Summerfield Thread

Another one done, Beyond The Sun. An improvement on the first story but still nothing great. The story jumps around a bit & there’s a lack of urgency to the whole thing. Maybe down to the acting or direction but things just happen with no real dramatic tension or drive. Zero pace. It’s basically not very well written. The only engaging character is Benny, Bowerman is the one highlight of this. Not something I’d return to.

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